ChatGPT 說：
Short answer: It is understandable, but not well-structured.
Here is why, and how to improve it.
✅ Why it is not well-structured
1. “Attract a lot of people to read” is awkward
Native speakers rarely say attract people to read.
They would say:
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attract many readers
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appeal to many people
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draw a large audience
So the verb attract with an infinitive (to read) sounds unnatural.
2. The clause “when each of them is only the journal of a person” is clumsy
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when is not the most natural connector here
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each of them refers to memoirs, but the repetition feels heavy
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the journal of a person is accurate but too literal and wordy
Native structure would be smoother and more compact.
3. Overall rhythm is long and unbalanced
The first half is heavy; the second half is slow and literal.
A refined sentence needs better flow and clearer contrast.
✅ Well-structured, natural alternatives
Most natural
Why do some memoirs attract so many readers even though they come from just one person’s private journal?
Elegant
Why do certain memoirs draw large audiences, even though each one begins as a single individual’s journal?
Academic
Why are some memoirs widely read, despite being derived from one person’s private journal?
Literal but well-formed
Why do some memoirs gain so many readers when each is simply an individual’s personal journal?
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